Monday, November 9, 2009

The hare and the tortoise

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3 comments:

  1. Karly HahnNovember 9, 2009 at 9:42 AM

    I like the visuals of this piece - the graphics are nicely done and interesting to look at. I think some more elements added to the piece - more props or stage set ups, etc. - would make it stronger.
    Technically it works pretty well, although when the tortoise is running past the hare it is too fast and looks hectic.
    I think the concept is good - I like the idea of having be a play put on by actors, complete with the red theatrical curtain. I like what I saw and would like to see more! Good job

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  2. Elisha FleckNovember 9, 2009 at 9:58 AM

    Technical:
    The buttons are a too jumpy, prob just need to be eased in/out. The narrative flows smoothly. I do appreciate the instructions on where to click, even though you made it fairly obvious with the graphics. The sound is nice, but very recognizable; I would consider rehashing it a little more to make it your own; I could tell you sort of layered it to make it more original and suit the story, but it sounds a little rough after a while.

    Aesthetic:
    I really like your characters and the graphics look good for them. You've got nice illustrative style. But the typography should get a little more attention...doesn't seem to connect back to the story or the theme; feels out of place. You skewed the type a lot too, and that may just be me being anal about typography stuff, but I think you should revisit those and make them look more natural (no skewing!)

    Concept:
    Very creative way to show the story: setting it in a play!! I think it was an awesome solution but I would go even further with it (maybe sounds: dull applause/audience noises, etc.), more props and even more animation relating to it, like Karly suggested.

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  3. christian anzolaNovember 9, 2009 at 10:08 AM

    let me begin with the technical part your drawings look really good however i would like to see more animation with the characters, maybe if i was able to click on the and they would move or something... Something like you have with the bunny closing his eye, .. the pages flow well however , animating the text, or having more interactivity would be really cool... The design and the composition works well like i said before your drawings are really well done... I really like the idea of having everything in the stage... the overall design works however i think you can work more on the type...... good job

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